He looked at her from the corner of his eye again and again as he managed to get a seat for his wife and daughter on the opposite seat of that crowded bus from Mumbai to Pune.
The cacophony did not have any impact on his feeling nostalgic of the beautiful night spent with her, each second unpredictable and wishful.
She looked at him, their gaze clashed as she sheepishly smiled at his state, he contrary thinking about her beautiful face and attractive body.
“Hi am Lata, are you going to Pune for work or family?” the wife introduced offering her biscuits as she picked one and replied, “I am Tarannum, family, she continued with an incomplete smile, “I now work with a Two wheeler company as a receptionist in Pune.”
The first time he looked straight at her still thinking on the word now she added to stress she no longer was the prostitute he had chanced on a year back.
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That was some powerful writing on Melancholy by Shashank, raw emotions and thoughts flowed! Nostalgia is one of my favorite words (if you wonder can one even have favorite words, yes, I can 🙂 ) So there was no discussion, it was straight fit nostalgic and I did not want to give a love angle to nostalgic to that’s my take and for another super 5 sentence fiction on the same feeling read Shashank’s post here.
nice it ended that way, i had a foreboding of a sad end
happy I made it unpredictable for you Aroraji.
He he.. That’s a nice one :), a completely unexpected twist and a totally elegant one 🙂 .. Nice post Shweta 🙂
Thank you Vinay, happy you liked the twist 🙂
Very emphatic message… Good one.
Thank you Aditya, happy you liked it 🙂
I was definitely caught unaware! its a decent and beautiful end of what could be a sad story as I was thinking in the start …
A great job yet again dear … love the way you write 🙂
Hahaha…. Sad story! Shweta’s forte (pun intended) :p
Great plot nicely presented with a powerful message. 🙂
Common that wasn’t funny Ravish, nor was the story sad. You misread Kokila’s comment.
Thank you for calling sad stories my forte (no pun here), I agree and happily welcome the compliment as it takes creativity to touch a chord in this chaotic world!
Wanna try your hand at a Five sentence fiction?
As I understand, neither Kokila nor I said that it is sad. Kokila thought in starting that it’d be sad but found it beautiful. The question is why she thought that it’d be sad? :p
Do you wanna me to write five sentence fiction?
hmm you delve in psychology, I am happy writing fictions 🙂 of course you should try your hand at fiction esply FSF 🙂
The narration as per the fiction and the emotions and values that says in simple way couldn’t have been jotted better! Very well written Ananya!
Thanks Shashank, writing the April Challenge with you was a great experience indeed!
Great kahaani mey twist as always!!
seedhi kahaniyan mazedaar kahan Deepakji 🙂
very nice account.. Wish everybody can redeem themselves..
absolutely Roohi, happy you liked it 🙂
Beautiful story with strong lines. Loved it Shweta…
Thank you Gowthama happy you liked it 🙂
Another excellent piece of writing with twists and turns.
You know the reason right Abhijit, it’s to get an appreciation from friends like you:)
As enjoyable as ever Shweta. Hope to see the next 5 line fiction soon.
After writing 26 all through April, FSF will run away from me 🙂 glad you liked it 🙂
Love the way u twist our minds while readin ur lines 🙂
Bling Bling
thank you babe, feels nice that it has the right impact I desire!
That was a totally unexpected ending!
🙂 was intended Sreesha, I really liked rebirth story, superb!
Thanks! 🙂
Astonishing five liner, Shweta! Astounding indeed!!
Thank you Amit ji, koshish jaari hai 🙂
Family adds so much credibility, Soul-sis 🙂
Powerful word!
Beautiful!
You’re a champion with the Five-sentence-fiction…. !!! Need I say more? <3 you…
Wow that is some nostalgia…made me nostalgic..or it did not…your writings alwas strike a chord in my heart and soul 🙂
So less written and so profound.
🙂
Good job.
Now that was the ending I didn’t expect. Great writing, Shweta.
That was tricky. Family is such a blessing, indeed.
A wonderful twist at the end!
Hmm, that was a quick turn in the end…enjoyed it.
Vow! a true missile at the end. Nice post Shweta.
Short and effective write up. The ending is indeed an unexpected blast. Great job.
I read most of your posts of this A-Z challenge in one go. All are brilliant. But, this one is just outstanding Shweta. I already read this post thrice before posting this comment.:) Superb 😀